英語日記欣賞：把愛帶給全世界
October 28 Friday Sunny
Last week something terrible took place in our class:one of our classmates Xiao Li, fell down the stairs of our classroom building. He got badly hurt. He had to stay in hospital for a long time. How unfortunate he was!
So this afternoon all our classmates and our teacher, Mr Yan, were going to the fields to help Xiao Li s family gather the grain.
After lunch we set out. It was a long way from our school to Xiao Li s home. It took us half an hour to get there by bike.
Then we walked to the fields, bent down and began to work. Some of us worked very quickly though some had never done any farming work before. Time went by quickly and we knocked off about 4 o clock.
Xiao Li s parents were thankful. “It s very kind of you to come and help us,”they said. They invited us to have a rest in their houses and gave us a lot of things to eat. After that we went back.
Now I realize it s important to help and care for each other, and we should regard the each classmate as a member of a big family.
Let s bring love to the whole world.
<點(diǎn)評>文章中某些語言上的運(yùn)用很到位，點(diǎn)評如下：
(1)“一件壞事”不應(yīng)說成 a bad thing。a bad thing 是“一件壞東西”，故此處用了 something terrible。that 引導(dǎo)的同位語從句改成了“：”，這樣更符合英語表達(dá)習(xí)慣。
(2)wound 一般指“用武器致傷”，事故受傷要用 injure 或 hurt.
(3)在英語中“嚴(yán)老師”，應(yīng)說 Mr Yan。
(4)field 泛指“農(nóng)田”時(shí)，一般用復(fù)數(shù)。
(5)根據(jù)上文 help 應(yīng)是 went to the fields 的目的狀語，而不是并列的動(dòng)作，故應(yīng)用不定式 to help。另外，Xiao Li s family 如果用 them代替則指代不清。這種指代不清的錯(cuò)誤，中國學(xué)生尤其要注意避免。用代詞時(shí)，一般上下文要有相應(yīng)的名詞存在。