Spring,a Good Time for Exercising
Spring is coming. Every life revives. Grass turns green in Fudan and everyone seems to be full of energy. A good time for exercising, isn't it? As darkness falls, the gymnasium is open for those who have a strong desire to strengthen their bodies.Soon the gymnasium is full of people, the weak, the strong, the tall and the short.
The first person that comes into my sight is standing in front of the mirror. He is quite muscular. Of course he wants everybody here to see how strong he is, so he is stripped to the waist and poses like a Greek statue, wearing a look of pride on his face. If you feel weary of this self-love fellow, please direct your sight to another person. He lifts a barbell above his knees and keeps this posture for a long time. His face turns red while he keeps shouting to support himself. Others can't help worrying about him for his blood seems to burst out from the vein on his face. At last he puts down the barbell and only then have I come to notice that his T shirt is soaking. From the silhouette of his back, I can see every piece of his muscle. The last person that draws my attention is in the corner. He sits on a chair with two dumbbells in his hands. He keeps lifting them, speechless.After a while, he drops the dumbbells and start to exercise on other body building apparatus without a moment's rest. He is like a machine that never feels tired.
Besides the three people, everyone here makes a deep impression on me. They prefer the dull exercising to playing outside. They win my respect for they are true men.
簡(jiǎn) 評(píng)
本文中，人們以另一種方式迎接春天的來(lái)臨——進(jìn)行體育鍛煉。作者沒(méi)有面面俱到地寫(xiě)人們進(jìn)行了哪些體育活動(dòng)，而是把目光集中在三個(gè)人身上，突出了他們的不同特點(diǎn)。第一個(gè)鍛煉者有一身發(fā)達(dá)的肌肉，赤裸著上身擺出各種姿勢(shì)；第二個(gè)鍛煉者在舉杠鈴，臉漲的通紅，血管都似乎要厚裂了；第三個(gè)鍛煉者坐在角落里練習(xí)啞鈴，然后不知疲倦地到另一個(gè)體育器材上進(jìn)行鍛煉。最后，作者對(duì)這些經(jīng)受著枯燥鍛煉的人們表達(dá)了敬意。本文避免了此類(lèi)文章常犯的因顧及面面俱到而往往寫(xiě)得不夠深刻的通病，通過(guò)對(duì)三個(gè)代表人物細(xì)致的刻畫(huà)，由點(diǎn)及面，描繪了一幅人們熱火朝天地艱苦鍛煉的場(chǎng)面。
文中有一些細(xì)節(jié)的描寫(xiě)給文章增色不少，如his blood seems to burst out from the vein on his face,his T-shirt is soaking等，非常生動(dòng)，表現(xiàn)了作者細(xì)致的觀察力。
(點(diǎn)評(píng)教師：黃鶯)