英語四級考試作文沖刺點撥（上）

　　四、六級考試越來越使模板無用武之地，閱卷老師在閱卷的過程中最多的是關(guān)注同學(xué)們的用詞和句型的使用。

　　高分作文標(biāo)志

　　1：四級120-150字；六級150—180字；

　　2、是否長短句交叉；

　　3、用詞是否恰當(dāng)，準(zhǔn)確，形象，盡量使用能夠吸引閱卷老師眼球的閃光詞；

　　4、關(guān)鍵詞是否換用，切勿老用重復(fù)詞；

　　下面給出寫好一篇作文的注意事項：

　　1. 適當(dāng)用被動代替主動，這樣能更客觀的反映事實,句子開頭不要總是用we / i (比如寫結(jié)尾時不用we should pay attention to而用attention should be paid to. )舉個經(jīng)典結(jié)尾2004年六月六級作文的最后一段：it is, therefore, high time that some applicable approaches were implemented by the service industry like that. thus，its competitive edge will be sharpened effectively.

　　2. 善于使用插入語，比如說把副詞、連接詞等，作插入語放在中間，一般放在主語、動詞或者助動詞后，兩邊分別加上逗號。

　　如however / therefore /for example/i believe做插入語放在中間，一般放在動詞，助動詞后，兩邊分別加上逗號。

　　比如說：other individuals, however, take the attitude that…

　　3.一定要學(xué)會換詞，換形象，具體的代替太寬泛的。(考試中一般不要出現(xiàn)good, bad , many, thing, think, people, opinion等等)比如上面例子中，applicable代替proper; approaches代替ways; implement代替carry out; sharpen one's competitive edge代替enhance one's competitiveness(提高某物競爭力)

　　下面舉一篇我班上一位同學(xué)寫的優(yōu)秀作文(14分)的例子，看看他是如何運用各類寫作技巧的。這位同學(xué)把老師上課講的各類寫作手法和精彩替換和句型都用上了，作文有了很大的提高。

　　標(biāo)題：computer and i

　　第一段：i never forget the exceedingly thrilling day when my mother bought me a computer as birthday present, which exerted a tremendous fascination on me so that i indulged myself in googling an army of useful information i had expected, and enjoy a sea of melodious classic music. that night i was sleepless, feeling that the whole world belonged to me.

　　exceedingly替換very

　　thrilling替換exciting

　　sth. exert a tremendous fascination on sb替換sb. be interested in sth.

　　google替換search

　　an army of替換a lot of

　　第二段：the dawn of the new century witnessed the increasing popularity of computers. coincident with the advancement of science and technology, computers pouring into the current society as a fashion are appealing to growing individuals. it is no exaggeration to say that we have been submerged by them, in large measure!

　　the dawn of the new century witnessed是一個精彩句型，用來描述在某個時期發(fā)生了什么事情；

　　increasing popularity替換more and more popular

　　coincident with…非常地道的詞匯，表達"與…一致"的意思，替換with…

　　advancement替換development

　　pour into ( flood into / swarm into )替換enter into

　　current ( currently )替換now

　　appeal to sb.替換sb. be interested in sth.

　　growing individuals替換more and more people

　　it is no exaggeration to say經(jīng)典句型，說某事是毫不夸張的

　　第三段：to begin with, we can, freely, search desired information at any moment. little by little, our knowledge will be well enriched, and our horizons will be greatly broadened. additionally, we can get huge recreations online by chatting, playing games, or delivering email.

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