I have a very happy family.

　　my mother is a worker. how old is she? guess! she’s forty-five, she like watching tv. on saturdays and sundays, she likes going to the zoo. she doesn’t work on saturdays and sundays. my father is a worker, too.he likes swimming .and i and my sister is student. we both like playing  games and go  shopping.

　　my grandfather and grandmother likes running on saturdays and walking on sundays. they like ducks, but i don’t. i like dogs very much. in the evening, we watch tv. some times i listen to music. but my mother, grandfather and grandmother doesn’t, they like reading.

　　i love my happy family very much. do you like my family?

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　　my mother is a worker. how old is she? guess! she’s forty-five, she like watching tv. on saturdays and sundays, she likes going to the zoo. she doesn’t work on saturdays and sundays. my father is a worker, too.he likes swimming .and i and my sister is student. we both like playing  games and go  shopping.

　　my grandfather and grandmother likes running on saturdays and walking on sundays. they like ducks, but i don’t i like dogs very much. in the evening, we watch tv. some times i listen to music. but my mother, grandfather and grandmother doesn’t， they like reading.

　　i love my happy family very much. do you like my family?

　　批改

　　1.she’s forty-five, （and)she like(likes) watching tv.

　　2.and i and my sister is student改 and my sister and i are students.

　　3.and go(going)  shopping.

　　4.some times i listen to music.

　　5.grandfather and grandmother doesn’t，改為grandfather and grandmother don't like music.

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