My Roommate

　　It was my first day at the university. Carrying bags of luggage, I walked slowly into the dormitory building. I looked door after door for my name. At last I found it. In the room, there was already a girl making her bed.

　　Smiling shyly, she greeted me with "how do you do".Then, she continued her work, paying no more attention to me."What a stuck up fellow", I thought. Then I began to examine the room. It was no different from any other room I had seen.But it had been thoroughly cleaned by my new roommate, no doubt.

　　Minutes later, I started to examine her. She was thin, short and dark.  Her hair was in a completely disastrous mess like a bunch of straw.  Her dirty clothes and tired look were clearly signs of a long journey. Well, her 2'shirt was too big for her and her trousers were a bit short, which made her look funny.Furthermore, she wore a pair of rubber scandals, which were indeed out of fashion. In a word, she did not look like a smart freshman at all. "A yokel", I concluded.

　　The second time she spoke, her accent told me that she was from the south. "Shall I help you to get your luggage from the ground floor?" I did not refuse since I really needed help. Wow!She was quick in action. Before I said "Thanks", she had already walked out of the room and was soon far ahead of me.

　　"A good guy," I said to myself, "I will make friends with her. "I hurried and caught up with her.

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　　本文作者通過(guò)細(xì)致的觀察和生動(dòng)的語(yǔ)言，使一個(gè)淳樸少女的形象躍然紙上。作者敘述了上大學(xué)的第一天對(duì)室友的第一印象。有外表的描寫：黝黑瘦弱矮小、頭發(fā)像一團(tuán)亂草堆、穿著不合身的衣褲和過(guò)時(shí)的涼鞋。由此，作者得出的結(jié)論是她是個(gè)“鄉(xiāng)巴佬”。有語(yǔ)言的描寫："how do you do"，"Shall l help you to get your luggage from theground floor?"，雖然言語(yǔ)不多，但讀者能感受到這是一個(gè)熱心善良的女孩。還有行動(dòng)的描寫：整理完自己的床鋪后，幫作者搬行李，表現(xiàn)出她勤勞淳樸的一面。因此，作者最終產(chǎn)生了要和她交朋友的想法。本文字?jǐn)?shù)不多，情節(jié)簡(jiǎn)單，但作者成功地塑造了室友的形象：身材矮小，但有著高大的形象；衣著過(guò)時(shí)，但有一顆美麗的心靈，與作者相成了強(qiáng)烈的對(duì)比。作者對(duì)語(yǔ)言的運(yùn)用自如，有扎實(shí)的語(yǔ)言功底。文章讀來(lái)沒有晦澀生硬之感。

　　(點(diǎn)評(píng)教師：黃鶯)