Law Adjustment for Childrens Maturity A Necessity or Redunda

　　Law Adjustment for Childrens Maturity A Necessity or Redundancy?

　　Law Adjustment for Children's Maturity A Necessity or Redundancy?

　　As is pointed out by some socialists, children nowadays show a growing tendency to become mature at an earlier age compared with children who were born twenty years ago. The younger generation has a strong self-conscious. And they are eager to make their own decisions. Hence, an adjustment of current laws is suggested by some experts to fit in the newly developed situation.

　　That sounds like a good idea. But does it reveal the truth?Frankly speaking, the side effects of adjustments in laws, as far as I am concerned, are much greater than their possible merits.First of all, the assumption that "children are more mature than before" is yet to ascertain. Up to now, none of the revolution proponents can give a satisfying definition to tell what maturity exactly means, let alone measuring maturity quantitatively.Thus it is less likely for them to deduce their conclusion. At the same time, with the spreading of so-called maturity, more children are involved in crimes, including some violent ones like murders and hijacks. The conspicuous increase in adolescent crimes calls for an enforcement of law, not irresponsible liberation. Second, suppose the hypothesis held by the revolution proponents is not only objective but also convincing, ignoring the paradox mentioned above, it is still inadequate to conduct a law amendment since "most children are mature" implies the fact that there are still a portion of children, who no matter older or younger are mature. As is known to all, laws are concerned with all the objects of the society. The pre mature ones' rights should also be protected equally. Hence, a common demand for custodians of children aged under eighteen is necessary, if not imperative. Last but not least, a "mature" child who intends on independence lacks a necessary income as the financial support.Due to this situation, if an adjustment of law were carried out,there would be a peculiar phenomenon that children are decision independent while financially reliant.

　　Due to the three reasons listed above, it is unwise to conduct a complete law adjustment at the moment. Children of the twenty first century are still in need of love and care, as children were twenty years ago.

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　　李瑩同學(xué)的這篇作文分為三段，第一段作為introduction，在第二段分三個(gè)方面進(jìn)行論述，最后一段進(jìn)行總結(jié)。結(jié)構(gòu)清晰，觀點(diǎn)鮮明，是這篇作文的一大優(yōu)勢(shì)。

　　作者的語(yǔ)言功底扎實(shí)，尤其善于使用詞組和習(xí)語(yǔ)，如last but not least，if not等的使用準(zhǔn)確而恰當(dāng)。作者還善于使用各種語(yǔ)篇的銜接手段，銜接詞的使用使邏輯清晰，顯得思維縝密，這是本文的又一大優(yōu)勢(shì)。

　　作者的不足之處在于開(kāi)頭和結(jié)尾略嫌平淡，如果作者能夠進(jìn)一步精心雕琢自己的語(yǔ)言，充分發(fā)揮自己的創(chuàng)造力，文章就更上一層樓了。

　　(點(diǎn)評(píng)教師：孫東云)

　　Law Adjustment for Childrens Maturity A Necessity or Redundancy?