Let a Child Be a Child,Let a Child Be a Child范文

　　Let a Child Be a Child

　　Let a Child Be a Child

　　The traditional culture and current situation of China been taken into account, adjustment of laws to recognize the maturity of children at an early age thus seems to be hasty and impractical.

　　It would be ideal if everyone in society were responsible for their own actions and words, if they were in other words in dependent individuals in law. However, children over 15 are a special group, especially in China.

　　The adjustments of laws may require two assumptions,first, children over 15 are already mature enough to make good decisions for their own lives. Second, they have the ability to pay for their misbehavior. Unfortunately, nowadays children in China fail in both aspects.

　　Under the great care and love of the parents, the behavior of most children over 15 can never be described as premature. Half a century ago, children at the age of sixteen or seventeen were already doing heavy work in factories and earning money to help support the family, while children at the same age today are still pure flowers in the greenhouse which absorb the sunshine and wait for watering. They receive monthly allowance, leave their clothes washed by parents and wait for dinner to be ready. It is because of the lack of social contact and experience that children over 15 may seem unsophisticated, and even naive sometimes.The focus of children's lives moves between the family and school. Though children themselves may take it for granted that they have grown up and could act like adults, actually they are

　　While children's immaturity hinders the adjustment of the law, the attitudes of parents and teachers reflect that it is impractical to do so. Since each family could only have one child at present, most couples pay meticulous attention to their children and always try to interfere with the decisions of the children.Furthermore, teachers also have great influence on children, as well as their behavior. To some extent, it would be unfair to punish a child's misbehavior against law, neglecting the child'signorance and immaturity, and ignoring the adults' influence.For children over 15 still cannot be regarded as independent individuals in law.

　　It is obvious that children over 15 in China are dependent on their parents and liable to take others' opinions. So it's not the right time to allow them to do things which go beyond their ability. Just let a child be a child.

　　簡(jiǎn) 評(píng)

　　本文構(gòu)思新穎。作者擁有律師般敏捷的思維，通過(guò)縝密推理細(xì)致分析，對(duì)是否賦予青少年自主權(quán)這一問(wèn)題做出明確論斷。文章的獨(dú)到之處主要表現(xiàn)在以下三個(gè)方面：

　　一.標(biāo)題醒目，引言與結(jié)尾設(shè)計(jì)巧妙。標(biāo)題“l(fā)et a child be a child，，中兩個(gè)“child意義不同，意味深長(zhǎng)的點(diǎn)明文章中心。引言直奔主題，干凈利落。結(jié)尾又總結(jié)全文，點(diǎn)明題目，呼應(yīng)開(kāi)頭，令人印象深刻。

　　二.推理論證嚴(yán)密有理。作者先闡明法律上的理想狀態(tài)，再提出達(dá)到這一狀態(tài)的兩個(gè)前提條件，進(jìn)而針對(duì)兩個(gè)前提分別分析中國(guó)青少年現(xiàn)狀，最后得出結(jié)論：目前尚不具備條件。論證以邏輯推理的方式層層推進(jìn)，結(jié)構(gòu)嚴(yán)整而又不落俗套，給文章平添幾分雄辯的氣勢(shì)。

　　三.文體合乎主題要求。對(duì)立法問(wèn)題的討論，需要客觀、慎重、正式的文風(fēng)。本文第一句的復(fù)雜長(zhǎng)句和被動(dòng)的結(jié)構(gòu)都體現(xiàn)出莊重的風(fēng)格。全文用詞正式，句子結(jié)構(gòu)相當(dāng)緊湊。

　　不足之處在于，本文倒數(shù)第二段中心不夠明確，最后一句既是論點(diǎn)又是論據(jù)，分析較為矛盾，影響了議論的邏輯性。

　　(點(diǎn)評(píng)教師：辛紅葉)

　　Let a Child Be a Child