我在大學(xué)第一年

　　My First Year in College

　　Many high school graduates wrongly assume that university life is totally free from worries. After a period of serious and solemn study in senior three, the hard beavers expect to take a break and develop some habits. However, many may find later that the situation may be beyond their anticipation.

　　I＇ve tried to convince the adults around that the image they have of my university life as a free and unrestrained one is some what misunderstanding. In reality, school life is so busy that I sometimes wonder if my energy is enough.

　　About my first year in college, my life is mainly made up of two parts, study and practice.  As a student, the main task is study. In order to gain a high GPA, I have to get used to the college life style and begin a new pursue in study. It is the learning method that shows off most of the differences between senior study and college study. ! have a roommate who goes out to have lessons in the morning and comes back in the evening after the self-study classroom is closed. The peers＇ behaviors make me feel under pressure. In university, one% view of life is integrally formed and strengthened. I begin to program my future plan and realize that study itself is an affair for me. The more courses I learn by heart, the more maturity I get. University education ensures students of better jobs.  I usually reckon that time consuming on study is worthwhile as it bears such important events as occupation, career and responsibility.

　　To some extent, study and practice are intertwined, and they begin from the very start of freshman year. Student Union enjoys almost complete acceptance. It is a place where one can get his ability trained, have his competence applied and make a lot of friends who share the same interests with him. But sometimes, social activities and practices are time consuming, what＇s more, the sense of responsibility also requires you to make effort to fulfill the task.

　　No one starts in one＇s present position all along that it was what he or she wants to do. Sometimes, the chance will just lead you down some unforeseen trail only if you have a prepared mind. My first year in college is not relaxed, but all way along is full of curiosity and satisfaction.

　　簡  評(píng)

　　通過這篇作文，我們看到了一個(gè)值得佩服的女大學(xué)生，學(xué)習(xí)努力，又積極參與社會(huì)實(shí)踐，具有明確的人生目標(biāo)，大一的生活過得充實(shí)而幸福。

　　從intertwine，time consuming，reckon等詞匯可以看得出來，作者的語言功底較為扎實(shí)，詞匯的使用準(zhǔn)確而地道。作者從學(xué)習(xí)和實(shí)踐兩個(gè)方面進(jìn)行闡述，并在末尾進(jìn)行了總結(jié)，對(duì)文章開頭進(jìn)行了呼應(yīng)，顯示了作者嫻熟的寫作手法。

　　不過，從標(biāo)題來看，這篇文章應(yīng)當(dāng)是寫作者對(duì)大一的總結(jié)和感受。論述提綱也是如此，但作者有點(diǎn)過于注重論證，去justify自己各方面的行為，而非從內(nèi)心自我的角度出發(fā)去談自己的感受，作者除了在第二段用了幾個(gè)I作為句子的主語以外，文章的其余部分幾乎沒有用I或my，反而是用了幾次you，這樣顯得客觀有余，親切不足，是本文的美中不足之處。