2020高考全國2卷英語作文賞析

20xx高考全國2卷

　　假定你是李華，想邀請外教 Herry 一起參觀中國剪紙(paper-cutting)藝術展。請給他寫封郵件，內容包括：

　　1. 展覽時間、地點;

　　2. 展覽內容。

　　注意：

　　1. 詞數(shù)100左右;

　　2. 可以適當增加細節(jié)，已使行文連貫。

學生實例1

　　分數(shù)：24分 四川德陽中學

　　Dear Henry

　　I'm Li Hua, the leader of the paper-cutting club in our school. Last time you told me you looked forward to learning more about traditional Chinese culture. Now I'm glad to tell you there will be a Chinese paper-cutting exhibition held by our school. I sincerely hope you can set aside some time for the art feast.

　　The exhibition, the theme of which is "beauty of China", will take place in the school hall from 2 to 5 on the afternoon of June 21. Not only will our club's works be displayed, but we also have a valuable set of paper-cutting created by a famous artist of this field. Besides, there will be a lot of useful and interesting activities, from which you can have a clearer picture of Chinese culture.

　　I would appreciate it if you accept my invitation. I'm sure it can leave a wonderful impression on you! I'm looking forward to your reply.

　　Best wishes!

　　Yours,

　　Li Hua

　　1. 邏輯性較好，層次分明，連貫恰當;

　　2. 運用詞塊、句型豐富;

　　3. 個別用詞需要改進比如說leader, leave a wonderful impression不符英語表達習慣;

　　4. 第一段不夠簡潔。

學生實例2

　　分數(shù)：23.5分 岳池中學

　　Dear Henry,

　　I have known that a Chinese paper-cutting exhibition whose subject is about Chinese festivals will be held in our city.

　　Knowing that you have a great interest in Chinese traditional culture, I am writing the e-mail to invite you to visit the exhibition together with me. The exhibition will be held in the museum from 9a.m. to 7pm. on June 15th, which will last for only one day. On that day, the works of paper-cutting artists from all over China will be exhibited in the museum. Just as I have told you, it is about Chinese traditional festivals. Therefore, in the exhibition, not only can the skills of these paper-cutting artists be enjoyed, but also you can know more about the customs of our Chinese traditional festivals from these beautiful works.

　　Time permitting, please contact me. I am looking forward to visiting the exhibition together with you.

　　Yours,

　　Li Hua

　　1. 覆蓋了全部要點，使用了較多語法結構和詞匯;

　　2. 沒有明顯語法錯誤;

　　3. 硬傷：主題句不夠突出;

　　4. 句式套用比較生硬：例如：not only but also; time permitting…

學生實例3

　　分數(shù)：22.5 吉林 磐石一中

　　Dear Henry,

　　Our school will hold a paper-cutting exhibition. It's a great honor for me to invite you as a special guest. Paper-cutting is an indispensable style of art. Therefore, I hold the opinion that this show is of extreme significance.

　　Main points are as follows. To begin with, it will start at 9:00 on 15th Jun and last for one week in our auditorium. Besides, a wide range of activities will be held, including the competitions between different classes, which will be the highlight of this show. Last but not least, taking advantage of this golden opportunity, we can not only enhance our understanding of Chinese indigenous culture, but also enrich our cultural life.

　　All in all, I'm longing to see you soon.

　　1. 覆蓋了全部要點，行文流暢

　　2. 結構清晰，使用了較多復雜的語法結構和高級詞匯;

　　3. 個別連接詞,過渡句使用有些生硬、突兀。例如：Main points are as follows.