2020高考全國(guó)2卷英語(yǔ)作文賞析

20xx高考全國(guó)2卷

　　假定你是李華，想邀請(qǐng)外教 Herry 一起參觀中國(guó)剪紙(paper-cutting)藝術(shù)展。請(qǐng)給他寫(xiě)封郵件，內(nèi)容包括：

　　1. 展覽時(shí)間、地點(diǎn);

　　2. 展覽內(nèi)容。

　　注意：

　　1. 詞數(shù)100左右;

　　2. 可以適當(dāng)增加細(xì)節(jié)，已使行文連貫。

學(xué)生實(shí)例1

　　分?jǐn)?shù)：24分 四川德陽(yáng)中學(xué)

　　Dear Henry

　　I'm Li Hua, the leader of the paper-cutting club in our school. Last time you told me you looked forward to learning more about traditional Chinese culture. Now I'm glad to tell you there will be a Chinese paper-cutting exhibition held by our school. I sincerely hope you can set aside some time for the art feast.

　　The exhibition, the theme of which is "beauty of China", will take place in the school hall from 2 to 5 on the afternoon of June 21. Not only will our club's works be displayed, but we also have a valuable set of paper-cutting created by a famous artist of this field. Besides, there will be a lot of useful and interesting activities, from which you can have a clearer picture of Chinese culture.

　　I would appreciate it if you accept my invitation. I'm sure it can leave a wonderful impression on you! I'm looking forward to your reply.

　　Best wishes!

　　Yours,

　　Li Hua

　　1. 邏輯性較好，層次分明，連貫恰當(dāng);

　　2. 運(yùn)用詞塊、句型豐富;

　　3. 個(gè)別用詞需要改進(jìn)比如說(shuō)leader, leave a wonderful impression不符英語(yǔ)表達(dá)習(xí)慣;

　　4. 第一段不夠簡(jiǎn)潔。

學(xué)生實(shí)例2

　　分?jǐn)?shù)：23.5分 岳池中學(xué)

　　Dear Henry,

　　I have known that a Chinese paper-cutting exhibition whose subject is about Chinese festivals will be held in our city.

　　Knowing that you have a great interest in Chinese traditional culture, I am writing the e-mail to invite you to visit the exhibition together with me. The exhibition will be held in the museum from 9a.m. to 7pm. on June 15th, which will last for only one day. On that day, the works of paper-cutting artists from all over China will be exhibited in the museum. Just as I have told you, it is about Chinese traditional festivals. Therefore, in the exhibition, not only can the skills of these paper-cutting artists be enjoyed, but also you can know more about the customs of our Chinese traditional festivals from these beautiful works.

　　Time permitting, please contact me. I am looking forward to visiting the exhibition together with you.

　　Yours,

　　Li Hua

　　1. 覆蓋了全部要點(diǎn)，使用了較多語(yǔ)法結(jié)構(gòu)和詞匯;

　　2. 沒(méi)有明顯語(yǔ)法錯(cuò)誤;

　　3. 硬傷：主題句不夠突出;

　　4. 句式套用比較生硬：例如：not only but also; time permitting…

學(xué)生實(shí)例3

　　分?jǐn)?shù)：22.5 吉林 磐石一中

　　Dear Henry,

　　Our school will hold a paper-cutting exhibition. It's a great honor for me to invite you as a special guest. Paper-cutting is an indispensable style of art. Therefore, I hold the opinion that this show is of extreme significance.

　　Main points are as follows. To begin with, it will start at 9:00 on 15th Jun and last for one week in our auditorium. Besides, a wide range of activities will be held, including the competitions between different classes, which will be the highlight of this show. Last but not least, taking advantage of this golden opportunity, we can not only enhance our understanding of Chinese indigenous culture, but also enrich our cultural life.

　　All in all, I'm longing to see you soon.

　　1. 覆蓋了全部要點(diǎn)，行文流暢

　　2. 結(jié)構(gòu)清晰，使用了較多復(fù)雜的語(yǔ)法結(jié)構(gòu)和高級(jí)詞匯;

　　3. 個(gè)別連接詞,過(guò)渡句使用有些生硬、突兀。例如：Main points are as follows.