Make a speech
boys and girla :
may i have your attention , please ? now i'd like to make a speech here .
at present , it's an universal phenomenon that many students often waste food and let the water running after washing , which will do great harm to our limited resources . meanwhile , we may develop the form of much bad habits in turn .
so , in this case , i want to make a call on all the students to protect our environment and make a contribution to the economical society as well . only by this way can we have a more harmonious world .
that' s all , thank you !
批 改 老 師oscar評 分80分級 別優(yōu)良評 語
批改：
1. boys and girla : 開頭稱呼單詞拼寫有錯誤。
2.it's an universal phenomenon that many students often waste food and let the water running after washing , 首先，冠詞使用錯誤；其次，后邊應(yīng)該是動詞原形。
3. we may develop the form of much bad habits in turn . 本句話說的啰嗦，直接就說 our bad habits will be developed.
評析：
本文是一篇發(fā)言稿，所以在格式上應(yīng)該符合發(fā)言稿的格式，比如在最后落款沒有發(fā)言人的姓名等；其次中間出現(xiàn)了幾個語法錯誤，而且書寫不是太規(guī)范。希望繼續(xù)努力�。�！