My mother
my mother is a teacher.she is strict with me.but she is friendly,too.today,i play computer games for 3 hours.she doesn't scold to me. she says "it's bad for your study".i'm very sad.because my mother is work hard for me.i see she is cooking in the kitchen.she cooks meals for me everyday.i want to say''thanks'' to her.she is tired everyday.so i'll listen to my mother.thanks,mum.
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my mother
my mother is a teacher.she is strict with me.but she is friendly,too.today,i play(playded) computer games for 3 hours.she doesn't (didn't)scold to(scold sb.for sth.\doing sth.責(zé)備某人…做某事，此處去掉to) me. she says (said)"it's bad for your study".i'm very sad.because my mother is (去掉is,此句用動(dòng)詞來做謂語(yǔ)成分）work （works)hard for me.i see she is cooking (see sb.do\doing sth. 應(yīng)為 i saw her cooking ) in the kitchen.she cooks meals for me everyday.i want to say''thanks'' to her.she is tired everyday.so i'll listen to (此處用obey聽從，listen to …表示聽（動(dòng)作）…)my mother.thanks,mum.（可加上i love you!)
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my mother
my mother is a teacher.she is strict with me.but she is friendly,too.today,i playded computer games for 3 hours.she didn't scold me. she said"it's bad for your study".i'm very sad.because my mother works hard for me.i saw her cooking in the kitchen.she cooks meals for me everyday.i want to say''thanks'' to her.she is tired everyday.so i'll obey my mother.thanks,mum . i love you!