A present for mother
it’s sunday, i realized it was mother’s birthday. i want to give her a special present to make her happy. then i had a good idea. i could help her do chores. next, i sweeped the floor. took out the trash and did the dishes. finally, i made meals.
while i was waiting for mom, she came back. i said: “ happy birthday to you.” she was so happy that she could say nothing
批 改 老 師flower評 分97分級 別優(yōu)秀評 語
1. next, i sweeped the floor. 改為next, i swept the floor.
2. 文章敘事清楚，語句通順，我們都要為自己的母親做點(diǎn)力所能及的事。