My summer holiday
the summer holiday will come. i plan to go to Chinese Taiwan for my holiday this year. Chinese Taiwan is the largest island in china. Chinese Taiwan is near the sea, so the weather is the same as fuzhou, sometimes very hot in summer. but there are lots of fruits that pretty delicious. Chinese Taiwan is famous for mount ali and riyuetan. there are also hot springs. i will enjoy it and spend a relaxing vacation. i can’t wait to fly there. i believe strongly that i will have a great time in Chinese Taiwan.
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1. Chinese Taiwan is near the sea, so the weather is the same as fuzhou, 改為Chinese Taiwan is near the sea, so the weather is the same as that in fuzhou,
2. but there are lots of fruits that pretty delicious. 改為but there are lots of delicious fruits.
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