我的女友-My Girlfriend

　　I hesitate for a moment after writing down the title of this article, because I've no idea where to start this story.  My girl friend definitely can not be described by only a few words. Some times she turns to me and asks "Why do you love me?" I am always stuck at that moment and then after a minute or two utter a few words "Because you're so good." I know my vague answer never satisfies her. But how can I reply otherwise?

　　Yes, she's so good. There're numerous examples I can cite to illustrate her tenderness, delicacy, warmth and her genuine love for me. A call on the cold winter night, a surprising birth day gift, a pair of gloves that warm up not only my hands, so many times has my heart melted into a sentiment called "being moved".

　　I'm not a good tempered guy. However, my girlfriend never loses her temper whenever I am not in a good mood or even say sharp words to her.  At that time, she'd look at me with great care and touch my hands with hers to calm me down.That's her graceful manner to show her deepest concern.

　　I have never written a love letter to her though I've received many from my dearest girlfriend. It's not that I'm unwilling to compose one, but that I find it impossible to convey my feelings to her with written words. We've been in love for more than one year. But if once more asked to give reasons why I love her, I guess I'd still say because she's so good.

　　I can't further this generalized answer into details because it takes me lifetime to do so.

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　　本文中，作者描述了女友的種種好處，表達(dá)了對女友的真摯感情。作者通過一些語言和行為表現(xiàn)了女友的細(xì)心溫柔和對他的關(guān)心，如寒冷冬夜里的電話、意想不到的禮物、在他心情不好的時候關(guān)心他等。文章語言流暢，感情真摯，字里行間流露出對女友的至愛，令人很受感動。如能舉一兩個具體的例子，少一些抽象的概述，則女友的形象會更加豐滿。

　　(點評教師：黃鶯)