A Letter of Application
Zhou Jun
Boston Consulting Group Inc.
×Plaza,×Road
Shanghai, PRC
Dear Mr. Johnson,
Your company's reputation and prestige led me to write this letter. Your advertisement in the November 15th issue of Wall Street Journal is of great interest to me. I feel that I have the qualification necessary to effectively handle the responsibilities of a Business Consultant.
It is said that consulting firms are panacea for enterprise predicaments. The reputation owes thanks to the diligent and intelligent consultants, who contribute their share of wisdom and ardor through their efforts, the king sized database and net work. The decision that I tend to make from the above reasons is that I am to join the elite, with my characteristic youngster's energy and courage.
I will graduate from Fudan University in July 2004. After more than 3 year's study in university, I, with confidence and motivation, determine that it is the consulting industry that I am eagerly for. Then, why am I fit for a Business Consultant position? First, my broad exposure to business management can bring more in-depth understanding of business operation and business process to organization and process design that your company involves. Secondly, my solid academic background and business training experience certainly nurture in me the capability of analysis and problem solving. Thirdly, my excellent communication and influencing skills enable me to better network and cooperate with the customers.
The enclosed resume describes my qualifications for the position advertised. I look forward to personally discussing my qualifications with you at your convenience. Thank you for your time and consideration.
Sincerely yours,
Zhou Jun
簡 評
關(guān)于如何寫求職信和簡歷的書籍汗牛充棟，按照現(xiàn)成的模板修修補(bǔ)補(bǔ)，完全可以炮制出一篇有幾分模樣的求職信，但寫出一篇真正優(yōu)秀的、能夠反映出個(gè)人特色的求職信，仍是相當(dāng)不易的。筆者深信，在林林總總的求職信中，周駿同學(xué)的這一篇完全可以脫穎而出。
首先，這篇作文完全符合求職信的格式，在首段提出自己的求職意向，然后分段講述自己對咨詢工作的了解，以及自己的教育經(jīng)歷和專業(yè)素質(zhì)，最后附上簡歷希望對方考慮等，結(jié)構(gòu)清晰，表述流暢。
其次，作者的行文如行云流水，從容自如，顯示了其相當(dāng)不錯(cuò)的英文功底以及對寫作文體的認(rèn)識。全文四個(gè)自然段中，第一和第四自然段一般都是套話，很難寫出特色，因此作者將充分利用第二和第三自然段將自己的才華和優(yōu)勢進(jìn)行了充分的展示。作者很善于使用一些名詞化結(jié)構(gòu)，在第三段尤其如此，使得文章顯得莊重典雅。表述自己的觀點(diǎn)時(shí)，作者也使用了不少大詞如predicament，elite，nurture等，無不顯得自然貼切。當(dāng)前很多大學(xué)生的詞匯量并不少，但能夠駕馭好龐大的詞匯量，是相當(dāng)不容易的。從business process，process design，network等詞匯來看，作者的確對咨詢業(yè)有一定的了解，良好的英文功底和對專業(yè)知識的充分了解，是求職者成功的秘密所在，也是本文成功之處。
(點(diǎn)評教師：孫東云)