高中英語作文點(diǎn)評(píng)：豫園 Yu Garden
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Yu Garden
豫園
If a foreign friend of mine is going to visit my hometown, Shanghai, I would like to take her to Yu Garden.
如果我的一個(gè)外國朋友參觀我的家鄉(xiāng),上海,我想帶她去豫園。
Yu Garden is a traditional Chinese garden located beside the City God Temple in the northeast of Shanghai. Here she will marvel at the exotic and exquisite beauty of the Chinese Garden. She can walk on the crooked bridge and take photos of the beautiful goldfish. Besides, she can taste the local cuisines like steamed buns, wonton noodles, soy milk. There are a variety of mouth-watering snacks there. Apart from the beautiful scenery and delicious food, she will also be attracted by the remarkable performance of different craftsmen. For example, she will see Shanghai-style paper-cutting, and the process of making Chinese candy and clay figurines.
豫園是一個(gè)傳統(tǒng)的中式花園坐落在上海的城隍廟在東北。她會(huì)驚嘆中國人的異國情調(diào)和精致的美麗花園。她能走在彎曲的橋梁和拍攝美麗的金魚。此外,她可以品嘗當(dāng)?shù)氐拿朗诚耩z頭,餛飩面條,豆?jié){。有各種各樣的美味小吃。除了美麗的風(fēng)景和美味的食物,她也會(huì)顯著的性能不同的工匠所吸引。例如,她會(huì)看到海派剪紙,中國糖果和粘土雕像的過程。
I believe my friend will have a great day if she visits Yu Garden. This is a place where the features of this city are combined.
我相信我的朋友會(huì)有美好的一天,如果她訪問豫園。這是這個(gè)城市的特點(diǎn)結(jié)合的地方。
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