My dream
i have a dream, i am supposed to have a robot named superman in the future. i will do the lots of job. for example, he could help me do housework and do the most unpleasant or dangerous jobs. the robot will also walk and dance and play with me. so we should work hard in school at the moment . hold on my dream. i believe that one day they must be come true!
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1. i will do the lots of job. 改為 it will do lots of job.
2. i believe that one day they must be come true! 改為i believe that one day they will come true!
3. 文章脈絡(luò)清晰, 立意新穎， 結(jié)構(gòu)完整，談了自己的夢想和應(yīng)怎樣去實(shí)現(xiàn)它。繼續(xù)努力！