My dream
my dream is to be a tercher.because i can teach many students.i can make friends with them.i'm going to stdy hard.i'm going to learn english very well because i want to be an english teacher.i'mgoing to pratise my english every day.i'm going to beijing foreige language university and i'm going to learn english there.i also like foreige culture.i'm going to learn english in america or emglish.
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1、a tercher 拼寫錯(cuò)誤 a teacher
2、i'm going to stdy hard.i'm going to learn english very well because i want to be an english teacher. 此句過于冗長，根據(jù)前后內(nèi)容，可改為i'm going to study english hard.because i want to be an english teacher. 注意單詞拼寫：study.
3、i'm going to beijing foreige language university and i'm going to learn english there.i also like foreige culture.i'm going to learn english in america or emglish. 此句前后沒有條理性，表達(dá)不清楚，有重復(fù)，可改為： i'm going to learn english in beijing foreign language university .i also like foreign culture. at last, i'm going to learn english in america or england some day. 單詞拼寫錯(cuò)誤: foreign \ english
4、在表達(dá)有先后順序的步驟時(shí)，可適當(dāng)?shù)剡\(yùn)用一些詞：first (at first )\ next \ then \ last(at last, finally)等等。
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my dream
my dream is to be a tercher.because i can teach many students.i can make friends with them. first ,i'm going to study english hard.because i want to be an english teacher. then, i'm going to learn english in beijing foreign language university . i also like foreign culture. at last, finally,i'm going to learn english in america or england some day.